O. V. Suvorova, Original Neutrino Fluxes and Hidden Mass in the Universe, Physics of Atomic Nuclei, 2011. Vol. 74, No. 1. pp. 122-129
In his essay, Suvorova analyzes the presence and nature of dark matter in the universe. He also analyzes dark matter's relation to neutrinos and weak interactions. He says that our universe is comprised of 95% dark matter and dark energy, which can be calculated with the help of the cosmic microwave background, gravitational lensing, and dynamics of galaxy clusters. According to electroweak theory, Suvorova says, only weak interactions can go on between the dark matter particles because of large boson masses. This short range doesn't allow for strong and electromagnetic processes.
Suvorova makes an interesting point in his essay. He quotes other theoretical physicists, drawing upon the experiments and work of other scholars to make his case. Every equation and every claim has a link to another physicists work, further proving that what he has to say about dark matter is widely accepted.
P.W. I feel like I've read and reviewed this article accurately and clearly, without losing any critical points from the work in my brief review. If I had to ask the reader something, I'd ask: is my first paragraph clear and fluid? Do you understand Suvorova's point?
In your own words, fully and with precision, describe what the assignment is asking the writer (your partner) to do? Please use your own words rather than merely quote from the assignment.
ReplyDeleteTake a scholarly article from a reputable source and summarize using your own words what the writer was essentially trying to put across. Also include the source in full MLA format at the top of your annotation. Then in the second paragraph analyze the writer’s credibility and analyze the source from which it came and determine if it is credible.
To what extent has your partner met the expectations of the assignment? Please pick a passage as illustration and describe what works well there. Again, try to use your own words.
“In his essay, Suvorova analyzes the presence and nature of dark matter in the universe. He also analyzes dark matter's relation to neutrinos and weak interactions. He says that our universe is comprised of 95% dark matter and dark energy, which can be calculated with the help of the cosmic microwave background, gravitational lensing, and dynamics of galaxy clusters. According to electroweak theory, Suvorova says, only weak interactions can go on between the dark matter particles because of large boson masses. This short range doesn't allow for strong and electromagnetic processes.”
This whole paragraph is good. She hit on all of the critical points of the article/essay summing it all up into a single paragraph. Plus she did all of this using her own words which is a proper summarization, no quotes or plagiarism.
I also liked her brief second paragraph that got straight to the point connecting the writer with reputable physicists and on the subject itself.
What area needs more work? Why? Please pick a passage as illustration and describe what isn’t working.
Where she might have hit all the points perfectly it might have helped to maybe explain briefly what is being said. But then again, whoever would be reading on this subject would probably more than understand what was being said. But for someone like me it would help, considering I probably know more about crocheting than dark matter to be honest, even though the subject is fascinating.
Please indicate TWO questions about the draft and at least ONE suggestion for ways to improve it.
Where did your interest in dark matter come from?
Why are you curious of it?
Again my suggestion would be just to briefly explain certain things to make it more understandable for most.